What do you think of this story I made up? Please excuse any errors. I just want your opinion on the story?
I’ve posted question twice in the last two days. You can go back and look at the other two questions I posted. I also have made some changes to it. Ok so give me your opinion. Please don’t bash it. Any constructive criticism would be nice. Thanks in advance!
Hi my name is Abigail Stewart and I am seven years old, and I have a huge secret. There is a troll in my backyard! Yep thatâ??s right a troll. Before I tell you about that I let me tell you a little bit more about me. I live in a big house with my mom, dad, and older brother Dexter who is nine and also my best friend, although he doesnâ??t know it yet. I love school. Last year I kinda got into a little bit of trouble. See my friend Jessica bought some frogs to school and set them loose and got into trouble. Jessica told the principal, who then told my mom that I told her she had to, or else I would eat all her cookies her mom packs for her lunch. Well if we are being honest, and mom says to always be honest. I did say that. I donâ??t remember saying that she HAD to. Anyway I got into trouble too. Ok thatâ??s enough of that, you might start to think that Iâ??m bad. Thatâ??s not so Iâ??m just very active. Letâ??s get on with the story.
Chapter 1
Abby stumbled into the kitchen wearing a pair of her momâ??s shoes. Today is going to be
a good day Abby said out loud to no one in particular, since her brother Dexter was in the living room watching cartoons, and her dad was away on a golfing trip. ABBY COME HERE RIGHT NOW! Her mom yelled. Uh oh Abby thought. I know what this is about. COMING MOM she yelled in return. Yes mommy? Abby what are ALL my shoes doing in your room and can you tell me why one of them has whipped cream in it? Well I was playing dress up and got bored. Then I decided to see how many cans of whipped cream it would take to fill up one shoe. Lucky for me it only took one. Oh yeah, mom can you pick up another can from the grocery store, we ran out., more
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